To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In deve

There are many characteristics attributed to a society that can analyzed to study its socio-economic conditions of it like culture, gross domestic product etc. But in the context of the topic, culture will be focus of this essay. A common perception might be that as major cities has highest concentration of people thus they are the right place for studying the culture of a society. But this perception is very presumptuous because assuming the entire population to be homogeneous.

First, major cities are vortex which draws people from all the country and different cultures. For example London needless to say it is one of the major financial hubs in the world. If one takes a stroll in the streets of the London, one can encounter people of different ethnicities. The proper British culture is not vivid but fusion of multiple cultures is in the city. Whereas the proper British culture can experienced in the countryside of the country. Thus generally major cities are not right place to study major characteristics of a society because of its diversity.

Furthermore, people who disagree would present the example of Seoul, South Korea. South Korea is very homogeneous country and large concentration in its capital Seoul doesn’t have a lot of diversity therefore making it right place to study Korean culture. But this homogeneity comes from the government that discourages long term stays and is very reluctant in providing citizenship to other nationals. And moreover this kind of countries are few in number and can’t be generalized for other major countries.

Finally, from above discussion on why the major cities like london because of diversity are not the correct representative of a society and an exception to this generalization, it can be correctly stated because of major cities being a hub of different cultures are not right representative of a society.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, whereas, for example, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1590.0 2235.4752809 71% => OK
No of words: 307.0 442.535393258 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17915309446 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05379413643 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 215.323595506 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498371335505 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 704.065955056 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.4057681964 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4666666667 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53333333333 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 10.2758426966 19% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123115651895 0.243740707755 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0444816550293 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.038362421995 0.0758088955206 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0769098030139 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339984395521 0.0667264976115 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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