Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position
“Focusing on passion led to success rather than course book. “Books is source of knowledge but only focusing on the course book of school will not teach student to learn the real world. In my opinion, I strongly agree the above statement that universities should create environment to focus not only on book but also in different courses outside the student’s field of study because of the following 2 reasons:
Better education led to better lifestyle. There is always a difference in between the living standard of educated and uneducated people. A person with variety of knowledge can live a sooth life. For example: If a student would introduce with knowledge of Yoga and meditation, he can live a peaceful life near future. His family member might get benefited by the knowledge. Yoga and meditation are very useful that can be use in day to day life for peace and healthy life. If student gets knowledge about these in university, they can guide their life to the right direction.
Job and skill are basic things that generates income for living. In today’s worlds, people are not happy with their job. They only compelled to do their job for money. If a student get chance to involve in different kind of course out of the regular course book, they would get chance to recognize their passion. This make them to work in their interested field with happy life. For example: MS dhoni “Indian famous cricketer” gets chance to enroll in cricket course in school. If he was not enroll in that course in school life, he would not have been found that cricket was his passion. He might be worked as engineer or any job that was completely out of his interest. That is why, if universities allows student to enroll in different activities and skillful courses that will help them to find and choose their passion.
In conclusion, Outside courses might affect in the regular courses however balancing and parallel study of them takes student education in next level. Universities should create environment to focus not only on regular book and courses but also in different courses outside the student’s field of study. This make them life a happy and peaceful life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Unpaired symbol: '”' seems to be missing
“Focusing on passion led to success rathe...
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Message: Unpaired symbol: '”' seems to be missing
...led to success rather than course book. “Books is source of knowledge but only fo...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'enrolled'.
Suggestion: enrolled
...cricket course in school. If he was not enroll in that course in school life, he would...
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Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help them find' instead.
Suggestion: help them find
...tivities and skillful courses that will help them to find and choose their passion. In conclusio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, for example, in conclusion, kind of, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1812.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 372.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87096774194 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54717316035 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47311827957 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.4442216046 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.2857142857 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7142857143 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2380952381 5.21951772744 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171745398869 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0544371093122 0.0831039109588 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558040603928 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123997868018 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536994744434 0.0667264976115 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 100.480337079 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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