When old buildings stand on ground that modern planners feel could be better used for modern purposes, modern development should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
“The achivement of the country is denoted by its historical records and artifacts”. The prompt given recommended that any building on the ground should be used for the modern purposes and suggested that the priority should be given modernization of old building rather than protecting them. I completely disagree with the prompt and claim that the old archaic building should be protected as it can be boon for the new generation to know about the old achievement; further it can boost out the country’s tourism sector. I would like express my point through the following three examples.
Firstly, in each and every country there are a lot of fact and achievement that they had attain in their history. These achievements of the country are the evidence of the grueling efforts that their ancestor which they had put on to make the country which are seen in the present context. For instance, The forts of the Gorkha of the Nepal are one of the place where the most fierce battle of the late king Prithivi Narayan Shah, King who unified the great present Nepal, had took place. So, this fort is one of the important place which would represent the great king and his efforts forever to the coming generation. However, if such forts would be modernized than the real essence of the past time would be completely lost. And furthermore, the coming generation would not be informed about their history.
Furthermore, The view tower of the Kathmandu city, which is also known as Dharara was completely devasted during the devastating earthquake of the 2015 AD. As per the history the building blocks of the Dharara were made in the past by using a typical kind of mud and in place of cement it was made from a type of sticky grain known as Green gram. But during the reconstruction of the Dharara the previous material was left behind and was constructed through modern engineering where the iron rods and the cement were used for the construction. The new construction had totally left the thing history and time and after the history of Dharara would be completely forgotten by the new generation. The tower simply remains as a normal view tower. Had the government would have followed the way of the previous construction, it would had protected the history as well as it would have been a site of tourist place for the foreigners, due to historical importance.
Similarly, many Hindu people all around the world visits India in order to feel their complete history of the evolution and achievements of the Hindu gods. If all these historical places about Hindu gods would be modernized in India than these flow of the tourist from all over the world would also get dwindled.
There may be some people who might totally argue with this view point and argue that the old artefacts should be modernized and should be given modern view. They might be correct as the old artefacts may get ruined with time and can reached to the ramshackle condition with time and ultimately can get vanished. But in the name of the strengthening the old historical building, giving entirely the modern view would be completely wrong. However, there may be some cases where the modernization of old building have been effective but in most of the cases modernization have completely deteriorated the old historical building and especially there true old essence. So, they should strengthen proper but their historical essence should not be deteriorated.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 90, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'attained'.
Suggestion: attained
...t of fact and achievement that they had attain in their history. These achievements of...
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Line 3, column 90, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'attained'.
Suggestion: attained
...t of fact and achievement that they had attain in their history. These achievements of...
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Line 3, column 693, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...modernized than the real essence of the past time would be completely lost. And furthermo...
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Line 4, column 830, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
... of the previous construction, it would had protected the history as well as it wou...
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Line 6, column 157, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ion and achievements of the Hindu gods. If all these historical places about Hindu...
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Line 8, column 550, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cases'' or 'case's'?
Suggestion: cases'; case's
... have been effective but in most of the cases modernization have completely deteriora...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, similarly, so, then, well, for instance, kind of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 28.0 12.4196629213 225% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2867.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 584.0 442.535393258 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90924657534 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91590194646 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68760732525 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.421232876712 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 872.1 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2115963356 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.652173913 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3913043478 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13043478261 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306570495229 0.243740707755 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0903706375555 0.0831039109588 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.099867290286 0.0758088955206 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177762950638 0.150359130593 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106840346957 0.0667264976115 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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