The following sample issue response received a score of 6:
Whenever people argue that history is a worthless subject or that
there is nothing to be gained by just “memorizing a bunch of stupid
names and dates,” I simply hold my tongue and smile to myself.
What I’m thinking is that, as cliche as it sounds, you do learn a
great deal from history (and woe to those who fail to learn those
lessons). It is remarkable to think of the number of circumstances
and situations in which even the most rudimentary knowledge of
history will turn out to be invaluable. Take, for example, the issue
at hand here. Is it better for society to instill in future leaders a
sense of competition or cooperation? Those who have not examined
leaders throughout time and across a number of fields might not
have the ability to provide a thorough and convincing answer to
this question, in spite of the fact that it is crucial to the future
functioning of our society. Looking closely at the question of
leadership and how it has worked in the past, I would have to agree
that the best way to prepare young people for leadership roles is to
instill in them a sense of cooperation.
Let us look first at those leaders who have defined themselves
based on their competitiveness. Although at first glance it may
appear that a leader must have a competitive edge in order to gain
and then maintain a leadership position, I will make two points on
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this subject. First, the desire to compete is an inherent part of
human nature; that is, it is not something that needs to be “instilled”
in young people. Is there anyone who does not compete in some
way or another every single day? You try to do better than others in
your school work or at the office, or you just try to do better than
yourself in some way, to push yourself. When societies instill
competitiveness in their leaders, it only leads to trouble. The most
blatant example in this case is Adolf Hitler, who took competition
to the very extreme, trying to prove that his race and his country
were superior to all. We do not, however, need to look that far to
find less extreme examples (i.e., Hitler is not the extreme example
that disproves the rule). The recent economic meltdown was caused
in no large part by the leaders of American banks and financial
institutions who were obsessed with competing for the almighty
dollar. Tiger Woods, the ultimate competitor in recent golfing
history and in many ways a leader who brought the sport of golf to
an entirely new level, destroyed his personal life (and perhaps his
career -- still yet to be determined) by his overreaching sense that
he could accomplish anything, whether winning majors or sleeping
with as many women as possible. His history of competitiveness is
well documented; his father pushed him froma very early age to be
the ultimate competitor. It served him well in some respects,
but it also proved to be detrimental and ultimately quite destructive.
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Leaders who value cooperation, on the other ahnd, have historically
been less prone to these overreaching, destructive tendencies. A
good case in point would be Abraham Lincoln. Now, I am sure
at this point you are thinking that Lincoln, who served as President
during the Civil War and who refused to compromise with the
South or allow secession, could not possibly be my model of
cooperation! Think, however, of the way Lincoln structured his
Cabinet. He did not want a group of “yes men” who would agree
with every word he said, but instead he picked people who were
more likely to disagree with his ideas. And he respected their input,
which allowed him to keep the government together in the North
during a very tumultuous period (to say the least).
My point in choosing the Lincoln example is that competitiveness
and conflict may play better to the masses and be more likely to be
recorded in the history books, but it was his cooperative nature that
allowed him to govern effectively. Imagine if the CEO of a large
company were never able to compromise and insisted that every
single thing be done in exactly her way. Very quickly she would
lose the very people that a company needs in order to survive,
people with new ideas, people ready to make great advances.
Without the ability to work constructively with those who have
conflicting ideas, a leader will never be able to strike deals, reach
consensus, or keep an enterprise on track. Even if you are the
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biggest fish in the pond, it is difficult to force your will on others
forever; eventually a bigger fish comes along (or the smaller fish
team up against you!).
In the end, it seems most critical for society to instill in young
people a sense of cooperation. In part this is true because we seem
to come by our competitive side more naturally, but cooperation is
more often something we struggle to learn (just think of kids on the
playground). And although competitive victory is more showy,
more often than not the real details of leadership come down to the
ability to work with other people, to compromise and cooperate.
Getting to be President of the United States or the managing
director of a corporation might require you to win some battles,
but once you are there you will need diplomacy and people-skills.
Those can be difficult to learn, but if you do not have them, you
are likely to be a short-lived leader.
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Suggestion: This can; Those cans
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, so, still, then, well, for example, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 48.0 19.5258426966 246% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 38.0 14.8657303371 256% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 33.0 11.3162921348 292% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 103.0 33.0505617978 312% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 139.0 58.6224719101 237% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4832.0 2235.4752809 216% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 975.0 442.535393258 220% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9558974359 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.58793253288 4.55969084622 123% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08030998346 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 448.0 215.323595506 208% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459487179487 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1452.6 704.065955056 206% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 27.0 6.24550561798 432% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 13.0 1.77640449438 732% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 18.0 4.38483146067 411% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.2370786517 168% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.4507946613 60.3974514979 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.117647059 118.986275619 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6764705882 23.4991977007 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.61764705882 5.21951772744 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 86.0 4.97078651685 1730% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 5.13820224719 272% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181489735527 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456240815389 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0414406739329 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0303545311907 0.150359130593 20% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355057819225 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.08 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 193.0 100.480337079 192% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.8971910112 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.