Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
There is no doubt that overdependence on technology in current times has proved to be more detrimental to humans than beneficial.
Evolution, development and growth in all aspects, can be observed like never before. Just like there was Industrial Revolution which introduced us to machines and automated many labour-driven tasks, technology is more or less trying to do the same. I partially disagree with the statement mentioned as below is the stated reasoning for the same.
In earlier times, when cellphones were yet to be introduced in the market people used to remember all the contact details such as phone numbers, fax numbers and so on. But with the introduction of a phone containing a call directory people hardly try to remember the contact details. We tend not to use the memory-related part of our brain, which has eventually led to the weakening of our memory in the most frightful way that today if our mobile phone does not work we are lost. So, Mobile phones or technology, in general, has detrimental effects on humans.
Technology has aided in the fast and efficient transfer of data from one geographical location to the other. But this is want has turned the tables around. The spread of fake news is so common on the internet nowadays that one can not trust a piece of news without proof. The Spread of fake news and increase social activity like sharing pictures and ideas have led to hurtful comments from unrelated and socially insensitive people. These comments further led to a bad mental state. The users of these technologies are mainly young people and these people are prone to mental health issues that likely put our world in a dark future.
Technology has taken over the basic tasks which were a lot of labour oriented like the jobs of manufacturing. Now with technology stepping in the work is done at a faster speed and at higher efficiency and with less manpower. One such implementation is done at Tesla's manufacturing unit.
Hence, with the above reasoning if technology is used in the right way it will definitely help the human race to grow and develop in a positive way. Just we need to protect ourselves from the harmful side effects of our developments.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, so, in general, such as, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 356.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84831460674 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74140034453 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573033707865 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9417585601 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8888888889 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7777777778 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.94444444444 5.21951772744 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0972275310876 0.243740707755 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0286222056282 0.0831039109588 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446916263523 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0603792268918 0.150359130593 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417196988074 0.0667264976115 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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