Young people should be encouraged to pursue long term realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.

Morden development in techonology allow us to connect all pleople living around goble in fraction of second, with the help internet, social meadia like facebook , instagram , you tube,tik-tok etc. Apparently, people become enternet sensation over night throgh social meadial, most people get tempt to be one of them,longing for immediate fame and recognization,there are meager number of people, who suceeded. indeed, success defination get morph to some people, people get so mesmerized to prompt and fleeting success, so that they forget "ROMW WAS NOT BUILT IN A DAY". Nonetheless,everybody should remember that every thing is build in pain and slowly,just as tom curise-HOLLYWOOD superstar as many eminentn writter,director,actress,actros achivieve their sucess anything but over night.Even thoug immediate fame and popularity is tempting fascinating,young people should comply long-term and realistic objective which is not fleeting,percive as serendipity.

However, there are meager people who get immediate fame and popularity,for instanc- world final cup match 2014 was played between germany and argentina, only winner goal was scored by
german mid-fielder-mario gortezk to lift the tropy,on that particular day,he also elicipse the the stardom of gobal icon superstar leo messi,who play for argentina and barcelona fc, before match,before match world scarcely was cognizant of mild-fielder.so as short viedo of particular peolple become dessiminatio over the the internet at immediately everybpdy known the particular person.moreover,elephant in room is TIK-TOK viedo,some people become instant celebrity when their viedo get viral after upload in the platform.one the other hand it allure many
young people for same objective, fact is nither of them are not only popular but also sucessful as who follow long term and realistic goal,that is nobody remember dare to remember the german mid-fielder, mario gortez, after that match. lionel messi is stil gobal superstar of football world,some consider him as greatest of all time,scince the focus to perform in every
maatch and yearing to improve and evole applying one's mind,effort and energy.

Therefore, sports is most quintessential to young people,galvainze onself for enduring and persuing for on term long and realstic objetive rather than forwith fame and popularity whicch is
not meretricious,let alone fleeting and ramatince.In particular young people should focus to be accomplish to be expert in partiular field of their interest like math, science, technology,
arts and literature etc,which eventually engeder fame and poularity. since picasso and matasie didn't produce their best painting in over night,and leonel messi didn't messi isn't one night
wonder.

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...lp internet, social meadia like facebook , instagram , you tube,tik-tok etc. App...
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...ocial meadia like facebook , instagram , you tube,tik-tok etc. Apparently, people...
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...comply long-term and realistic objective which is not fleeting,percive as serendi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, however, if, moreover, nonetheless, second, so, therefore, as to, in particular

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2350.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 402.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.84577114428 5.05705443957 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.57456938931 2.79657885939 128% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624378109453 0.4932671777 127% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.2370786517 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 50.0 23.0359550562 217% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 263.484700694 60.3974514979 436% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 293.75 118.986275619 247% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 50.25 23.4991977007 214% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.75 5.21951772744 244% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.97078651685 161% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 56.0 7.80617977528 717% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246821254176 0.243740707755 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0948718765001 0.0831039109588 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0952049633267 0.0758088955206 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100999521546 0.150359130593 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0710351946976 0.0667264976115 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.2 14.1392134831 221% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 3.81 48.8420337079 8% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.92365168539 184% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.2 12.1743820225 207% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 17.54 12.1639044944 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.42 8.38706741573 136% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 100.480337079 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 22.0 11.2143820225 196% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, however, if, moreover, nonetheless, second, so, therefore, as to, in particular

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments