Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition
Many people would opt for the easy way in life. Efforts make you sweat, require commitment, dedication, motivation and hard work. Some people argue, it is not worth the effort if you can get fortunate enough to have life choose you. This statement may all sound very enticing but what it fells to account for is the reward and self-satisfaction from long journey outweighs any lucky success story.
There is no physicians that have become a competent professional overnight. It required long night of studying and often all-nighters to be able to accomplish a third of what we planned to accomplished from our daily schedules. Nevertheless, there is no greater satisfaction than to receive an A mark as a grade after weeks procrastinating. Passing a board have never feel any sweater after month of tedious studying.
In addition, the benefit of pursuing a long-term and realistic goal is that it depends on your control. Indeed, you may not be able to control the fortunate discovery that will give you fame or the beautiful figure that allowed you to be recognize in a restaurant as a mannequin, but you can work hard to succeed. As a matter of fact, there is no skills set that appear out of the blue. In dentistry, practice makes excellent. Preparing teeth in sequence in a simulation laboratory is the only way to improve your dexterity that will allow you to pass national boards or to be a successful cosmetic dentist. In addition, if it is a skills that has never been practice in the past, it will probably requires extra attention to become proficient.
There is always those that will argue that why work hard if you can get lucky. Indeed, being fortunate in life and having it easy can make the path a little easier.However, the relief to see light at the end of the road will be greater to the one that took each step independently and meticulously. It is true that celebrities that get recognize by agents and have instant fame took a shortcut in life but from their history of drug abuse, as it was the case for whitney huston, and many other that either died or ended up in rehab cutting their carreer short, it can be concluded that the reward seem not satisfactory enough. They seems to always be on the look out for more to satisfy their needs.
To conclude a long and laborious experience will only provide you with a greater satisfaction upon accomplishment. No skyscrapers were build in a day and the planet was certainly not. It took time, effort and dedication. It is a quality that can be controlled and shaped and goes beyond any immediate success story.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'There are no physicians'?
Suggestion: There are no physicians
...ney outweighs any lucky success story. There is no physicians that have become a competent profession...
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'an' or 'A' is left.
Suggestion: an; A
...no greater satisfaction than to receive an A mark as a grade after weeks procrastina...
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Line 2, column 368, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'felt'.
Suggestion: felt
...rastinating. Passing a board have never feel any sweater after month of tedious stud...
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Line 3, column 336, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are no skills'?
Suggestion: there are no skills
...k hard to succeed. As a matter of fact, there is no skills set that appear out of the blue. In den...
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Line 3, column 631, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a skill' or simply 'skills'?
Suggestion: a skill; skills
...cosmetic dentist. In addition, if it is a skills that has never been practice in the pas...
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'require'
Suggestion: require
... practice in the past, it will probably requires extra attention to become proficient. ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
... easy can make the path a little easier.However, the relief to see light at the end of ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e that celebrities that get recognize by agents and have instant fame took a sho...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...elebrities that get recognize by agents and have instant fame took a shortcut in...
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Message: The pronoun 'They' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'seem'
Suggestion: seem
...ward seem not satisfactory enough. They seems to always be on the look out for more t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, third, in addition, as a matter of fact, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2134.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 453.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71081677704 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83120134673 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529801324503 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.3360225904 60.3974514979 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5909090909 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45454545455 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132392590562 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0362582241174 0.0831039109588 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529815535631 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0694344613043 0.150359130593 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0255993180377 0.0667264976115 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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