Should young people be advised to pursue pragmatic long-term goals or should they be advised to pursue sudden recognition and immediate fame?. Although People are always said to be inclined in the mentality of achieving fame in a shorter term, those temperament will not keep those people in the same pinnacle for a greater and longer time. These people who achieved fame in a shorten time will be soon forgotten and be pushed towards their banal and common life styled personalities with the same pace they have gotten to this place of recognition. I agree with this assertion that young people must be motivated to pursue longer, realistic goals as this is the one which will benefit them long-lastingly.
To begin, People by being motivated to achieve a elongated goals will be continuously molded and will learn hard-tackling lessons all through their path of perseverance. whereas, people who achieved immediate fate would have not covered the bevy of problems that may cause in harm in their future. Let us consider a famous cinema celebrity De Caprio for instance, He have achieved this feat not because of his one fluke hit movie but because of his perseverance to became an all rounded, hard working actor who has been working around more than 15 years in cinema. He has toiled throughout his carrier and had learned meaning full success and failures which taught him what he should
and should not do. It is sure that he will be in fame forever until the Industry goes down. Whereas on the other side have a look at some youtube famous personalities. They might have become famous for their one amusing video although it seems very entertaining and interesting, people will sure forget the face and the channel as soon as those people stops uploading the video. He has continuously work hard, long and consistently post videos which should amuse in the same if not a higher extent to reside as youtube celebrity.
Some may argue by saying that one would not wait and endure for a longer time-lapse for becoming famous since, there are other shorter path for becoming famous. I would counter this statement by saying that "Any long lasting and straight hard worker will triumph the shorter and undisciplined ones". Not only the shorter one will lose fame as quick as they have achieved this feat but at sometime they might experience side effects as well. Let us consider body builders for instance. There are many ways in which a person could achieve the perfect body shape: One might go through a workout routine of hours and hours for years. whereas the other could indulge in intensive supplements with not so much workouts to achieve the same state. Some recently conducted research show that people who intake supplements runs the risk of nerve, bone weakness knee-joint, and even heart problems. This shows that it is not beneficial and good at all, for the young to pursue short-terms fame and recognition as they run the risk of rewards of side effects.
In essence, young people should always be pursue long-term and practical goals in order to achieve a fame that will withhold forever with them. The above example illustrates us that people by following shorter and immediate fame will fall into the traps of harm and will not gain a competency that will not be handy in keeping their fame to them. Thus it seems logical enough that perseverance and a pragmatic path will fetches us the superfluous fruit of fame.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 245, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this temperament' or 'those temperaments'?
Suggestion: this temperament; those temperaments
...ty of achieving fame in a shorter term, those temperament will not keep those people in the same ...
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Line 1, column 376, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...time. These people who achieved fame in a shorten time will be soon forgotten and be push...
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Line 3, column 48, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...n, People by being motivated to achieve a elongated goals will be continuously mo...
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Line 3, column 171, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Whereas
...all through their path of perseverance. whereas, people who achieved immediate fate wou...
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Line 3, column 171, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...all through their path of perseverance. whereas, people who achieved immediate fate wou...
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Line 3, column 368, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...ma celebrity De Caprio for instance, He have achieved this feat not because of his o...
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Line 3, column 619, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to mean'.
Suggestion: to mean
... throughout his carrier and had learned meaning full success and failures which taught ...
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Line 3, column 684, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...failures which taught him what he should and should not do. It is sure that he wi...
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Line 4, column 93, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e forever until the Industry goes down. Whereas on the other side have a look at some y...
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Line 6, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...eside as youtube celebrity. Some may argue by saying that one would not wait and e...
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Line 6, column 136, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'paths'?
Suggestion: paths
...g famous since, there are other shorter path for becoming famous. I would counter th...
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Line 6, column 641, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Whereas
...t routine of hours and hours for years. whereas the other could indulge in intensive su...
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Line 6, column 641, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t routine of hours and hours for years. whereas the other could indulge in intensive su...
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Line 6, column 710, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ge in intensive supplements with not so much workouts to achieve the same state. Som...
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Line 9, column 33, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[10]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'be' and 'pursue'.
Suggestion: be always pursue
...s. In essence, young people should always be pursue long-term and practical goals in order ...
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Line 9, column 348, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...be handy in keeping their fame to them. Thus it seems logical enough that perseveran...
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Line 9, column 421, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'fetch'
Suggestion: fetch
... perseverance and a pragmatic path will fetches us the superfluous fruit of fame.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, may, so, thus, well, whereas, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 31.0 12.4196629213 250% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 33.0505617978 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2869.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 588.0 442.535393258 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87925170068 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9242980521 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54019642467 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 215.323595506 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477891156463 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 882.9 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9668678973 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.739130435 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5652173913 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.78260869565 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241145125044 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806396498903 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775762311314 0.0758088955206 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151408708502 0.150359130593 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0758923921663 0.0667264976115 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 100.480337079 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.