Young poeple should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and regognitions.
It’s clearly true that young people such as students and young entrepreneurs should concentrate on the long-term plans of their developments that lead them to realistic goals instead of pursing immediate fame and reputations. Only by doing so, the youth are more likely to be successful and experienced in their future.
Firstly, students are supposed to focus on start planning the prerequisites for apply graduate schools or decent jobs for their future. If they had shortsightedly tent to chase their current fame, they would probably lose the chance to learn numerous academic subjects and to get fit in their social circles for the future. When studying in schools, students should determine their long-term goals which can potentially encourage them to take more attentions and interests on their current academic works in order to receive better GAPs which can be extremely useful for their graduate schools or careers. Also, for seeking to get a better position in companies, students are very likely tent to spend more time in student-hold clubs and organizations in order to make more friends and get involved in the circles, that possibly make it easy for graduates find better jobs. Therefore, in order to be more successful in the future, students are encouraged to make long-term goals instead of chasing short-term reputations.
In addition, young people in the companies also are supposed to make similar determinations for their careers. That is to say, young entrepreneurs need to make plans for their future, such as building their brands popular for consumers and making profits. In the case that if a young businessman tent to receive immediate reputations, he would recklessly start a price war with his competitors for enlarge the selling ratio of his products, which dramatically undermined his new-started company. In this situation, this young person needs to make plans for the big picture to gradually market his products and advertise the brand to make progresses one step at a time. By establishing the long-term goals, this businessman will have the capability to gaining more profits and beat his opponents in the market.
To sum up, in order to receive the greater change for a successful future, students need to focus on steps for their careers and further academic researches. And young entrepreneurs have the responsibility to make greater plans for marketing and developing. Thus, the youth are supposed to pursue longer-term goals than current fame and recognitions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 164, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'tented'.
Suggestion: tented
...heir future. If they had shortsightedly tent to chase their current fame, they would...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, so, therefore, thus, in addition, such as, to sum up, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2122.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 401.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29177057357 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91271820449 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486284289277 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3052973535 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.466666667 118.986275619 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7333333333 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26666666667 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189619915347 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0788894048027 0.0831039109588 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0882754786466 0.0758088955206 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143523095005 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682331153115 0.0667264976115 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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