The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
The comparision of the amount of four kinds of comestibles (chicken,beef,Lamb and Fish) which were consumed over 25 years from 1979 to 2004 is the focus of the line graph provided.
Overall, the consumption of beef ,Lamb decreased over period given while for chicken fluctuated, but general trend was upward compare to constant trend Fish.At the start of the period , Beef was the most popular product,which was replaced by chicken 1989 to 2004 and following that Fish was lowest position whole period of time.
With regards to the amount of Beef used, it began at about 220 grams and plunged to 180 g in 1981 before increasing sharply and hit the peak at 240 g in 1982. Following that this trend fluctuated downward and indicated 100g last year.Likewise , 150 g of Lamb was eaten in the first year after which the figure fluctated slightly and dropped to 52 grams in 2004.
On the other hand , the consumption of chicken started at 145 g in 1979. This figure , which fluctuated upward for 25 years and reached a new peak result at approximately 248 g in 2004 while Fish was eaten 60 g in initial year and fluctuated whole years and 40 g was accompined final years.
but general trend was upward compare to constant trend Fish
but the general trend was upward compared to the constant trend of Fish
by chicken 1989 to 2004
by chicken from 1989 to 2004
Fish was lowest position whole period of time.
Fish was in the lowest position throughout the whole period of time.
Sentence: The comparision of the amount of four kinds of comestibles chicken,beef,Lamb and Fish which were consumed over 25 years from 1979 to 2004 is the focus of the line graph provided.
Error: comparision Suggestion: comparison
Sentence: Following that this trend fluctuated downward and indicated 100g last year.Likewise , 150 g of Lamb was eaten in the first year after which the figure fluctated slightly and dropped to 52 grams in 2004.
Error: fluctated Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: This figure , which fluctuated upward for 25 years and reached a new peak result at approximately 248 g in 2004 while Fish was eaten 60 g in initial year and fluctuated whole years and 40 g was accompined final years.
Error: accompined Suggestion: accompanied
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