The result of surveys in 2000, 2005 and 2010 about one university
The table compares the score of some aspects given by students at university amongst the year 2000, 2005 and 2010. It can be clearly seen that there are significant improvement in each aspect except range of modules offered.
Initially in 2000, the survey showed that print resources was the best facility available at university, followed by building facilities, teaching quality, electronic resources and range of modules offered by 87, 77, 65, 45, and 32 respectively.
Next in the year 2005, there were some aspects, however, experiencing a drop in their ratings compared to the previous survey, such as: modules offered at 30 and teaching quality by 63. In addition, the electronic resources went up dramatically to 72 while range of modules went down to 30.
Lastly, the given survey in 2010 revealed that it was not all aspects obtained considerable results in this year, on the other hand, there were also a slight decrease, such as: print resources and range of modules offered by 88 and 27 in sequence, and a static result like teaching facilities.
To sum up, each aspect from the year 2000 to 2010 reflected dynamic changes as the results provided year by year.
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it was not all aspects
it was not all aspects obtained considerable results in this year,
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Answer : They were not all aspects obtained considerable results in this year
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They were not the aspects
They were not the aspects which obtained considerable results in this year
or:
Not all the aspects obtained considerable results in this year
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it was not all aspects obtained considerable results in this year,
Description: can you re-write this sentence?
flaws:
You only describe the table year by year. however, need to compare and contrast the changes in all years.
read the requirements:
'Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.'
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 10
No. of Words: 197 200
No. of Characters: 944 1000
No. of Different Words: 108 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.746 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.792 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.643 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 68 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 57 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 35 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.581 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.483 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.834 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4