The bar char shows an active participation rate in top ten sports in USA in 1998 and 2005 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

Essay topics:

The bar char shows an active participation rate in top ten sports in USA, in 1998 and 2005.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The information about the effective participation rates in sports Tennis,Cycling,Alpine Skiing , Volleyball, Basketball, Soccer,Swimming, ice hockey and Golf in USA in the years 1998 and 2005, is depicted by rendered bar graph.The data has been calibrated in percentage.
To begin with, In 1998 the maximum engagement was in Golf, it accounted for 23%.However second maximum position is occupied by Ice hockey in this year,it comprised to approximately a fifth. Nevertheless, Volleyball and Basketball had same rates , which is manifested to a 8%. While the minimum participate rate is observed in Cycling ,which is about 7%.
Moving further, same as in the first year Golf also in the top of the list in 2005, it is accounted for 21%. Nontheless , in this year lowest participation was observed in the tennis, it is approximately to a 7%.while Soccer and Ice hockey has same rates in 2005,which is comprised to 10%.
To cap it all, it can be vividly manifested that,In both the years Golf has maximum engagement while cycling and tennis has minimum participation in 1988 and 2005.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Cycling
...ive participation rates in sports Tennis,Cycling,Alpine Skiing , Volleyball, Basketball,...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 95, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...s in sports Tennis,Cycling,Alpine Skiing , Volleyball, Basketball, Soccer,Swimming...
^^
Line 1, column 128, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Swimming
... Skiing , Volleyball, Basketball, Soccer,Swimming, ice hockey and Golf in USA in the year...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 228, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...2005, is depicted by rendered bar graph.The data has been calibrated in percentage....
^^^
Line 2, column 80, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...ement was in Golf, it accounted for 23%.However second maximum position is occupied by ...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 150, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...n is occupied by Ice hockey in this year,it comprised to approximately a fifth. Nev...
^^^
Line 2, column 244, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...Volleyball and Basketball had same rates , which is manifested to a 8%. While the ...
^^
Line 2, column 270, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...had same rates , which is manifested to a 8%. While the minimum participate rate ...
^
Line 2, column 333, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... participate rate is observed in Cycling ,which is about 7%. Moving further, same...
^^
Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...005, it is accounted for 21%. Nontheless , in this year lowest participation was o...
^^
Line 3, column 130, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'year the lowest'.
Suggestion: year the lowest
...accounted for 21%. Nontheless , in this year lowest participation was observed in the tenni...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 183, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...articipation was observed in the tennis, it is approximately to a 7%.while Soccer...
^^
Line 4, column 49, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , In
...t all, it can be vividly manifested that,In both the years Golf has maximum engagem...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, while, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 906.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 176.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14772727273 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.37163681815 2.65546596893 127% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 275.4 283.868780488 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5760832967 43.030603864 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.428571429 112.824112599 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1428571429 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2857142857 5.23603664747 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 1.69756097561 766% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148249742082 0.215688989381 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733967552336 0.103423049105 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484178957822 0.0843802449381 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0981365683575 0.15604864568 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508261252311 0.0819641961636 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.2329268293 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 61.2550243902 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.3012195122 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 11.4140731707 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Cycling
...ive participation rates in sports Tennis,Cycling,Alpine Skiing , Volleyball, Basketball,...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 95, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...s in sports Tennis,Cycling,Alpine Skiing , Volleyball, Basketball, Soccer,Swimming...
^^
Line 1, column 128, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Swimming
... Skiing , Volleyball, Basketball, Soccer,Swimming, ice hockey and Golf in USA in the year...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 228, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...2005, is depicted by rendered bar graph.The data has been calibrated in percentage....
^^^
Line 2, column 80, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...ement was in Golf, it accounted for 23%.However second maximum position is occupied by ...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 150, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...n is occupied by Ice hockey in this year,it comprised to approximately a fifth. Nev...
^^^
Line 2, column 244, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...Volleyball and Basketball had same rates , which is manifested to a 8%. While the ...
^^
Line 2, column 270, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...had same rates , which is manifested to a 8%. While the minimum participate rate ...
^
Line 2, column 333, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... participate rate is observed in Cycling ,which is about 7%. Moving further, same...
^^
Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...005, it is accounted for 21%. Nontheless , in this year lowest participation was o...
^^
Line 3, column 130, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'year the lowest'.
Suggestion: year the lowest
...accounted for 21%. Nontheless , in this year lowest participation was observed in the tenni...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 183, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...articipation was observed in the tennis, it is approximately to a 7%.while Soccer...
^^
Line 4, column 49, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , In
...t all, it can be vividly manifested that,In both the years Golf has maximum engagem...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, while, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 906.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 176.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14772727273 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.37163681815 2.65546596893 127% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 275.4 283.868780488 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5760832967 43.030603864 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.428571429 112.824112599 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1428571429 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2857142857 5.23603664747 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 1.69756097561 766% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148249742082 0.215688989381 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733967552336 0.103423049105 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484178957822 0.0843802449381 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0981365683575 0.15604864568 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508261252311 0.0819641961636 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.2329268293 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 61.2550243902 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.3012195122 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 11.4140731707 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.