The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009 The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants

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The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.

While the bar chart illustrates the numbers of either males or females taking part in several evening courses at the education centre for adults in 2009, the pie chart compares the percentages of ages groups of these courses.
At first glance, although there were more men than women who enrolled in the sculpture class, most of the courses had more ladies joining than men. In addition, the majority of people attending these courses were at least 50 years old, who were going to retire and retired.
As can be seen from the bar chart, the figure for females who joined the language course ranked first among four courses, at around 40 people. Nevertheless, the number of men attending the painting class was the largest in comparison with other kinds of courses, which accounted for approximately 25 participants. Besides, the disparity between the numbers of women and men, who took part in the painting course, was roughly 5 people. Also, the figures for women who joined drama and language courses were twice times as high as that of men, which were 10 and 20 people respectively. Conversely, there were more men (about 10 people) than women (just under 5 people) who attended sculpture.
Turning to the pie chart, the highest percentage of people enrolling in these courses belonged to 50 or over age groups, at 42%. Next came the percentage of attendants who were from 40 to 49 years old, which was 26%. By contrast, only 5%, 11%, and 16% of participants who were aged under 20, from 20 to 29, and from 30 to 39 years old attended these classes.

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Average: 8.7 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 359, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to 39 years old attended these classes.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, conversely, first, nevertheless, so, while, at least, in addition, of course

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 3.15609756098 380% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1284.0 965.302439024 133% => OK
No of words: 270.0 196.424390244 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75555555556 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 3.73543355544 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48828255401 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 106.607317073 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537037037037 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 378.0 283.868780488 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.7232267991 43.030603864 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.727272727 112.824112599 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5454545455 22.9334400587 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27272727273 5.23603664747 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337042643065 0.215688989381 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136461289848 0.103423049105 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0953783428839 0.0843802449381 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236016484715 0.15604864568 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0967741961995 0.0819641961636 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 40.7170731707 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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