the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

Essay topics:

the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The following bar graph illustrates the proportion of Australian population in both genders who did exercises regularly in 2010.
Overall, female accounted for far higher percentages in almost age groups with the exception of the first and last one.
A closer look at the chart reveals that the highest figure of men was 52.8 % belonged to people between 15 and 24 years old while that of women was 53.3% of the group from 45 to 54 age. That means men did physical activity more regularly when they were young whereas women tended to do that when they were in mid-age. Furthermore, the percentage of female doing exercises steadily increased to reach a peak and then slightly decreased.

In contrast, that of male followed an opposite trend, they reduced their frequency of doing activity when they were 15 to 44 years old and then gradually rose in the next 4 periods. We can also see a similarity in the last age group, which both proportion of two genders were 46.7% and 47.1% for men and women respectively.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 75, Rule ID: WITH_THE_EXCEPTION_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'except' or 'except for'
Suggestion: except; except for
...higher percentages in almost age groups with the exception of the first and last one. A closer look ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, look, so, then, whereas, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 840.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 176.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77272727273 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59413717899 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 250.2 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.2756191795 43.030603864 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.0 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1428571429 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.85714285714 5.23603664747 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305147547551 0.215688989381 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123935856607 0.103423049105 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741807593922 0.0843802449381 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170752492576 0.15604864568 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0692219716477 0.0819641961636 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.2329268293 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 61.2550243902 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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