The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The bar chart have illustrate the percentage of men and women in Australian who worked out frequently in 2010.

Overall, it can be concluded women did more exercite than men at most of the age group, beside 15 to 25 years old.

For the women, most of the women in different age group have around 20 percent more than men that have a regular physical activities .The women than have the habit in the age group from 15 to 54 were increase gradually and start decline from 55 to 65 and over.

For the men, the men in the age group of 15 to 24 are the most that have frequently exercite habit in all age group of them. In the age group of 25 to 34, the percentage start to falling and the fall end in the age group of 45 to 54.There have a steady increasing tendency from the age group of 45 to 65 and over which increase between 1 to 2 percent.

Votes
Average: 8.2 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 687.0 965.302439024 71% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.13855421687 4.92477711251 84% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2501834573 2.65546596893 85% => OK
Unique words: 80.0 106.607317073 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481927710843 0.547539520022 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 208.8 283.868780488 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.4926829268 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.8949137256 43.030603864 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.4 112.824112599 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.2 22.9334400587 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4 5.23603664747 8% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 1.69756097561 589% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.386521951276 0.215688989381 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.224905576187 0.103423049105 217% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812620768019 0.0843802449381 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247806748451 0.15604864568 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780071698049 0.0819641961636 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.2329268293 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.36 61.2550243902 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.32 11.4140731707 64% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 22.0 40.7170731707 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.9970731707 138% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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