The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.Summarise the Information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.
Summarise the Information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

He given plan stated the layout of a colleage's sports centre now and the future development of it.

First of all, it can be observed the difference between the present and future planning is the outdoor courts will divide into the area for specific functions.

From the plan, we know that the midden area of ​​the centre which included the reception, seating, changing room, pool and the gym will be unchanged. In future plan, the outdoor courts that were at the left and right-hand side of the midden Area will divide in a number of rooms.

For the outdoor courts that were in the left of the centre, it will become a leisure pool, another changing room and a sports shop. For the outdoor courts that were in the right, it will be linked to the gym and become two dance studio, sports hall, the third changing room and a cafe.

It can be concluded, the sports centre will become more functioning and easier to stream different users.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 4, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'gave'?
Suggestion: gave
He given plan stated the layout of a colleages s...
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Line 5, column 47, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he plan, we know that the midden area of ​​the centre which included the reception,...
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Line 7, column 230, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'studio' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'studios'.
Suggestion: studios
... linked to the gym and become two dance studio, sports hall, the third changing room a...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, third, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 17.0 33.7804878049 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 783.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 168.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66071428571 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27470532093 2.65546596893 86% => OK
Unique words: 83.0 106.607317073 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494047619048 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 224.1 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 22.3725414793 43.030603864 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 111.857142857 112.824112599 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 22.9334400587 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 5.23603664747 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139190719292 0.215688989381 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800077607305 0.103423049105 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424223780758 0.0843802449381 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0937318190999 0.15604864568 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445916899983 0.0819641961636 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 40.7170731707 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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