At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay topics:

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

In now a day, there have some country's' population involve a larger number of young adults than the elderly. In my opinion, the young adults can contribute more to the society than the elderly and the government can focus the resources to the aspect beside health.

On one hand, young adults can provide a stable production force to the society. young adults refers to the person that just completed or having the higher level education and ready to start their career. most of them contain a number of professional knowledge that they learn from the university or other programmes. For a business, they are more expect to have a young adults as their employees rather than a older people just because they are easier to adapt the work and have a better work perfromance. so, we know that young adults can provide more contribution to our sociaty than older people just because they accepted a degree of eduacation and easier to feet in different job.

On the other hand, elderly is one of the considenation in the police of government. government's police must be consider all citizen in a country. As we know, the older of a person, the higher chance they get some desease. For most elderly, they are easy to have some health problem such as heart desease and some cancer. so, government required to put a number of resource to take care the elderly and this may become one of the biggest expense of government. it means that the government can foucus on the aspect for example technology development, eduacation and public facilities if there are less elderly.

To sum up, the advantage of this situation outweigt than the disadvantage of it just because it can provide more production force to the sociaty and decrease some of the expense of government.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, for example, such as, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1463.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8125 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6310505226 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473684210526 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0139068327 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.5 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7142857143 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92857142857 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145408310896 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0546989822926 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535363984108 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103277856598 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268085118319 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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