The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The information regarding the proportion of austrailian males and females of six distinct age groups who took part in exercises in year 2010 is depicted by the proffered bar graph.The data is calibrated in form of numerical form.

Overall, it can be noticed that women spent more time on exercises as compared to men except age group of 15 to 24.While men reached their peak during teenage.

At a fleeting glance, males showed a lowest proportion of 39.5%,of age group 35 to 44.Similarly, females during teenage years,accounted for only 47.7% which was the least.Moreover, both men and women showed a increase in proportion of exercise of age 45 to 54.

Furthermore, the figures of male in 15 to 24 achieved a highest percentage then this figure decreased to 43.1% in age group of 45 to 54.While, women present a upward trend in proportions from 25 to 34 age to 65 and over.Last but not the least, old male and female showed a slight difference between them.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, moreover, regarding, similarly, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 823.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9578313253 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97009334747 2.65546596893 112% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.650602409639 0.547539520022 119% => OK
syllable_count: 241.2 283.868780488 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 41.0 22.4926829268 182% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.8251833882 43.030603864 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 205.75 112.824112599 182% => OK
Words per sentence: 41.5 22.9334400587 181% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.25 5.23603664747 310% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 1.69756097561 707% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249542880882 0.215688989381 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14358800244 0.103423049105 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.00842220190609 0.0843802449381 10% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14358800244 0.15604864568 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00842220190609 0.0819641961636 10% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.7 13.2329268293 172% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.32 61.2550243902 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 10.3012195122 176% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.38 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.06136585366 115% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.4329268293 171% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.4 10.9970731707 167% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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