The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart compares the proportion of various age group of Australian men and women who engaged in physical workout regularly in 2010. Overall, it can be seen that the majority of males, particularly teenagers do more exercise, whereas the number of females, mainly those who aged 45 to 54 engaged in physical activities more compared to teenage females.

The facts of the bar chart data reveal thatmainly males who aged 15 to 24 were committed to more physical activities thataccount for 52.8%, but, till 35 to 44, symmetry of this activism declined significantly (39.5%). However, beginning from males aged 45 to 54, till senior males aged 65 and over, the percentage of this activism went up to 46.7%.

On the opposite, it is obvious from the females' proportion that the most active females were 45 to 54 which corresponds53.3%. Moreover, young women were less active compared to men aged 15 to 24. Likewise, it can be noted that the number of male and female who are 65 years old and over was nearly the same with 46.7% and 47.1% respectively.

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Average: 9.2 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 258, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, likewise, moreover, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 881.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 181.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86740331492 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75580420634 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591160220994 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 267.3 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9193421953 43.030603864 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.857142857 112.824112599 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8571428571 22.9334400587 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 5.23603664747 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321644123391 0.215688989381 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161622568865 0.103423049105 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150521156066 0.0843802449381 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212858320391 0.15604864568 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0878001616677 0.0819641961636 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.2329268293 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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