The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart presents the number of men and women who did regular activity in Australia in 2010. The information, according to six different age groups of each gender, are illustrated in percentage.

Overall, in both genders, the attendance were different from age groups. However, women were more likely to take part in regular exercise than men, with exception women in age group between 15 and 24.

Among women, the lowest percentage of attendance is in age group from 65-year-old. Nevertheless, this figure was slightly higher than that of men. 53.3 % women from 45 to 54-year-old spent time on daily exercise, this is the highest proportion in the chart. Group ages from 35 to 44 and 45 to 54 saw the similarity in number of people engage in regular exercise with 52.5% and 53%, respectively. Females in group age 25 to 34 attended with 48.9%, and it just slightly higher than that in younger group ( 47.7%).

Among men, the highest figure was in youngest age group( 15 to 24) at 52.8%. This is only group had percentage of participants higher than women. The data demonstrated the similarity in group 25 to 34( 42.2%) and 45 to 54 ( 43.1%). The percentage of men in group age between 55 and 64, with 45.1%, was just lower than the youngest and the oldest group.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, nevertheless

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 33.7804878049 133% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1048.0 965.302439024 109% => OK
No of words: 221.0 196.424390244 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74208144796 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65762711847 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 106.607317073 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511312217195 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 299.7 283.868780488 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.3407990311 43.030603864 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.6153846154 112.824112599 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 22.9334400587 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.92307692308 5.23603664747 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256512077878 0.215688989381 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108716929341 0.103423049105 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077855021599 0.0843802449381 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194486410622 0.15604864568 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0786596827839 0.0819641961636 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.2329268293 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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