the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

Essay topics:

the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The graph depicts the portion of male and female with the various ages in Australia who did gradual physical exercise in 2010
At a glance we can observe the most female did more exercise rather than male over the period.
The male with 15 to 24 took a greatest portion in doing physical activity at 52,8 percent. This number then decreased to the smallest portion with merely at 39,5 percent for the age 35 to 44 before it saw a gradual upward when the male getting older with 45 to 54, 55 to 64, and 65 up at 43,1; 45,1; and 46,7 percent respectively.
Turning to the female, beginning with 47,7 percent only for the youngest age in this graph 15 to 24, it shows a regular incline to the peak at 53,3 percent for people 45 to 54 before the percentage of women doing routine physical activity decreased for 55 and over at 47,1 in the end of period
As the exception, the young male 15 to 24 year had a higher preference than young female to follow the physical exercise as their routine agenda.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 29, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...he period. The male with 15 to 24 took a greatest portion in doing physical acti...
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Line 3, column 103, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...l activity at 52,8 percent. This number then decreased to the smallest portion with ...
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Line 4, column 111, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: the; a
...st age in this graph 15 to 24, it shows the a regularly incline to the peak at 53,3 p...
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Line 4, column 115, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('regularly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('incline') instead of another adjective.
...ge in this graph 15 to 24, it shows the a regularly incline to the peak at 53,3 percent for people ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 0.0 7.0 0% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 815.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 187.0 196.424390244 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.35828877005 4.92477711251 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34963306583 2.65546596893 88% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534759358289 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 245.7 283.868780488 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 46.0 22.4926829268 205% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 126.34674511 43.030603864 294% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 203.75 112.824112599 181% => OK
Words per sentence: 46.75 22.9334400587 204% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.0 5.23603664747 19% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141713942412 0.215688989381 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0890271134204 0.103423049105 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473645086299 0.0843802449381 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0865471255387 0.15604864568 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064487043993 0.0819641961636 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.5 13.2329268293 170% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.17 61.2550243902 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 10.3012195122 172% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.9 11.4140731707 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 11.4329268293 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 20.4 10.9970731707 186% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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