the bar chart below shows the percentage of men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

Essay topics:

the bar chart below shows the percentage of men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The bar chart depicts the average of Australian males and females who did daily distinct physical activity in different ages in 2010.

The most striking feature to be observed is that the participants of women in physical activities was highest in all age groups compare to men.

It can be vividly seen that, From 15 to 44 age group, the participation of
women in physical activity increased slowly and reached at 52 percent. After that, it stayed constant at 53 percent. Further, from 64 to 64 age group, females participation in physical activities declined from 53 to 47 percent.

Turning to rest of description, between 15 to 44 age group, the figure of men in physical activities followed a decreasing trend, falling from 53 to 38 percent.Further, from 45 to 65, a considerable rise could be seen, rising from 43 to 48 percent. As far as comparison is concerned, in the yonger age men's participation in physical activities was largest compare to women. Moreover, a big difference between the participation of men and women could be seen in the age of 35 to 44.

Votes
Average: 7.5 (5 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 893.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 184.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85326086957 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06617603726 2.65546596893 115% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527173913043 0.547539520022 96% => OK
syllable_count: 268.2 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0677632843 43.030603864 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.625 112.824112599 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 22.9334400587 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.23603664747 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345277747374 0.215688989381 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.175537540962 0.103423049105 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106231427331 0.0843802449381 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214771696517 0.15604864568 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104661704418 0.0819641961636 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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