The bar chart below shows the percentage participation of men in senior development in three companies between 1980 and the year 2010.Summaries the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart below shows the percentage participation of men in senior development in three companies between 1980 and the year 2010.
Summaries the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The statistic illustrates the comparison of the percentage of men in senior development position between ibm, microsoft, as well as apple from 1980 to 2010. Overall, the highest percentage of it occurred in 2010 which it was reached by ibm that had successful to positioning men in senior development up to 60%. In in contrast, during 1980 to 1985, ibm was indicated as the worse company that it just positioned men in senior development less than 10%.

Furthermore, since 1985 to 2010 the percentage of men in senior development in ibm lean to escalate tremendously, which it attained more than 50%. On the other hand, from 1980 to 2010 microsoft constantly was positioned as the second rank which increased the number of men in that position by slightly.

In comparison, apple is the opposite of ibm that since 1990 to 2010 the number of senior developments which was positioned by men in apple tend to fluctuated. during 1980 to 1990, apple was the first rank that had successful to placed men in that position more than 10%. However, throughout 1995 to 2010 apple was positioned in the third rank as caused it just positioning men in senior development undermost than ibm and microsoft.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 313, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: In
...ng men in senior development up to 60%. In in contrast, during 1980 to 1985, ibm was ...
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Line 5, column 160, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: During
...ned by men in apple tend to fluctuated. during 1980 to 1990, apple was the first rank ...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, second, so, third, well, in contrast, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 33.7804878049 139% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 994.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 203.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89655172414 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77462671648 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9030790032 2.65546596893 109% => OK
Unique words: 85.0 106.607317073 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.418719211823 0.547539520022 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 287.1 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 15.2228241467 43.030603864 35% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 124.25 112.824112599 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.375 22.9334400587 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 5.23603664747 229% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203841292375 0.215688989381 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128985690635 0.103423049105 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564364662251 0.0843802449381 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171329123108 0.15604864568 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0526721055944 0.0819641961636 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.2329268293 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 61.2550243902 103% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.4329268293 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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