In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour.What do you think are the causes of this?What solutions can you suggest?

Essay topics:

In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour.
What do you think are the causes of this?
What solutions can you suggest?

In the contemporary era, most of schools in numerous countries in the world have severe problems with student behaviour. In my view, one important aspect of this problem is modern education system which implemented in various regions has effected towards the decrease of moral values among student. I hold this view for several reasons which are set out below.

First, I would like to argue that modern education system which was inspired by capitalism tradition has utilized cognitive and technological knowledge as the measurement of successful of education. due to these conditions, most of student gravitate to be more technocratic person who limited social relation and cohesion among them.

On the other hand, referring to Ivan Illich, Professor Emeritus of Sociology of education at University of California Los Angeles stated that the modern education system which diminished ethic lessons had implicated towards the increasement of apathetic and individualistic among students. To be sure, apathetic and individualistic attitudes might effected to the negative impact, such as students do not have peer group among them, and they might be stressful due to feeling alone.

due to these conditions, in my own opinion I believed that the modern education system should transform itself by prioritizing attitude and traditional values as its main curriculum. There are two positive impact of them, i.e. student becoming more polite and care towards their friend, teacher, as well as parents, and student should be pride stand on their traditional identities which it adhered to the sense of national and communal belonging.

Taking everything into consideration, moderately I believe that modern education system has successful to doctrine student to be more technocratic person, tend to increase the number of apathetic and individualistic student, as well as the inability student for keeping peer group among them.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...dent for keeping peer group among them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, well, such as, as well as, in my view, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53716216216 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99769930955 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577702702703 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.1694456913 49.4020404114 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 163.9 106.682146367 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6 20.7667163134 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118468888289 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623643695727 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0840440952399 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0721456645205 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751157610197 0.056905535591 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 13.0946893788 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 25.12 50.2224549098 50% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.88 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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