The bar chart below shows the results of a survey conducted by a personnel department at a major company The survey was carried out on two groups of workers those aged from 18 30 and those aged 45 60 and shows factors affecting their work performance

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The bar chart below shows the results of a survey conducted by a personnel department at a major company. The survey was carried out on two groups of workers: those aged from 18-30 and those aged 45-60, and shows factors affecting their work performance.

The chart shows the percentage of the factors influence work performance by personal department which has a different aged between 18-30 and 45-60.

According to the data, the percentages of the working performance are 100% for 18 until 30 years old. The percentage of the chance for personal development is the higher position which it has 90%, follow by relaxed working environment and the promotion prospects that they are the same ratings 80%. Furthermore, the money has 75%, and the job satisfaction owns approximately 53% for the factor. Finally, the job security has 40%. In the contrast, the competent boss and the respect from colleagues decrease gradually than the old aged (45-60).

Secondly, the percentages of the aged performance start from 45- to-60. The percentage of the money is the higher position than others by the previous performance. In the sameness, the ratings of the team spirit and the work environment have 60% and 30% by the younger (18-30) and the older old (45-60).

To sum up, the percentage of the factor by report starting from 18-to-30 years old, the percentage of the chance for personal development is the highest position in the map.

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Sentence: The chart shows the percentage of the factors influence work performance by personal department which has a different aged between 18-30 and 45-60.
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