The bar chart below shows the results of a survey conducted by a personnel department at a major company. The survey was carried out on two groups of workers: those aged from 18-30 and those aged 45-60, and shows factors affecting their work performance.

The given horizontal layout depicts the information, that there are two groups of workers; 18-30, and 45-60. There are 10 factors, which are affecting the work performance. The survey conducted by a personal department of major company. It is clearly and coherent representative.
To begin with, there a ten factors which are responsible for, impact on work performance.The some major factors are,chance for personal development, relaxed working environment, promotion prospects, and money. Probing ahead, the group of young people is more affected with the chance for personal development at 95%, relaxed working environment, it is around 79% there are some other factors nor then 50% .
Secondly, the group of adults is heavily affected with the money factors. It is around 70%, and the fact of team spirit is around 60%. Meanwhile, the chance for personal development, and relaxed working environment is less affected on second age with the comparison of first age groups. Moving further, the factor of team spirit on 45-60 aged group is heavily affecting. It is around 50%. In spite of, the influenced of other factors are neither more than 50 percentum.
In conclusion, it is evident that, Chance for personal development, and relaxed working environment is highly affected the work performance of first age group. Whereas, second age group is less affected by this factors, and more affecting of a money factor.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 104, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , chance
...actors. There are some major factors are,chance for personal development, relaxed worki...
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Line 2, column 393, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...here are some other factors nor then 50% . Secondly, the group of adults is heavi...
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Line 4, column 207, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...s, second age group is less affected by this factors, and more affecting of a money ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, second, secondly, so, then, whereas, while, in conclusion, in spite of, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 7.0 271% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 3.97073170732 353% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1150.0 965.302439024 119% => OK
No of words: 220.0 196.424390244 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22727272727 4.92477711251 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85128510684 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84288239353 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 106.607317073 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504545454545 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 344.7 283.868780488 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 0.482926829268 1242% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.5391213803 43.030603864 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.6666666667 112.824112599 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6666666667 22.9334400587 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13333333333 5.23603664747 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257569831102 0.215688989381 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.093528643541 0.103423049105 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736691667073 0.0843802449381 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184791047698 0.15604864568 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.082546140328 0.0819641961636 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 61.2550243902 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.3012195122 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.46 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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