Bullying is a big problem in many schools.
What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 254 words.
The given topic asks to reason out the cause of bullying in school and to provide certain ways to mitigate them.
In my opinion, bullying in schools is just a small version of the society we live in . In society, we tend to neglect diversity in colour, region, behaviour, culture, custom, race and nationality. Ignoring the nature of these differences, we continue to humiliate, judge and suppress whoever we find different and weak. A child, being brought up in this environment imitates this behaviour and gets used to the so called fact that different people who form minority are ought to be lower than the majority. This renders the privileged, the right to bully and the downtrodden, the duty to be submissive.
Contrary to society, in school, students get bullied due to very normal differences such as being shy, wearing spectacles, carrying old bags etc., The bully will be a person who has the capacity to create gang or sometimes fight. However, the root cause for these will be the social circumstances which we have built.
To counteract this, a strong school curriculum is required. Government must coordinate with educational experts, social activists, child psychologists & teachers to frame a syllabus which can impart a sense of harmony, integrity, diversity and mutual respect in the minds of the students. Such an action can provide a long term benefit in shaping the students' character and thereby protecting the different ones from emotional distress.
An other action which could be beneficial is construction a robust anti-bully committee in schools.Though they are present today, they are inactive or ineffective in most cases. The committee must comprise of all the stake holders including representatives from students' side and a coordinator to ensure the proper functioning of the committee. It should nurture confidence in the student getting bullied to report the things happening to him.
Finally, law makers should not be law breakers. What will happen if the adults who teach students, harmony and diversity, acts indifferently in society? The next to come will also be the same. Thus it is the responsibility of every adult to treat people with mutual respect for their children to not bully or get bullied
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 85, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... small version of the society we live in . In society, we tend to neglect diversit...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...vide a long term benefit in shaping the students character and thereby protecting the di...
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Message: Did you mean 'another'? This word sequence is usually spelled together.
Suggestion: Another
...ferent ones from emotional distress. An other action which could be beneficial is con...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Though
... robust anti-bully committee in schools.Though they are present today, they are inacti...
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Line 9, column 198, Rule ID: COMPRISE_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprise' or 'consist of'?
Suggestion: comprise; consist of
...ctive in most cases. The committee must comprise of all the stake holders including represe...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...The next to come will also be the same. Thus it is the responsibility of every adult...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, so, thus, such as, in most cases, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 1.00243902439 1197% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 6.8 191% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 20.0 5.60731707317 357% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 33.7804878049 142% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 965.302439024 196% => OK
No of words: 365.0 196.424390244 186% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17534246575 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 3.73543355544 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91423740673 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 106.607317073 209% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61095890411 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 283.868780488 203% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 4.33902439024 230% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 8.94146341463 201% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3993010122 43.030603864 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.944444444 112.824112599 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2777777778 22.9334400587 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.23603664747 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 1.13902439024 615% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111200115748 0.215688989381 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0364678793562 0.103423049105 35% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0237745657851 0.0843802449381 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0611250606685 0.15604864568 39% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0146815335558 0.0819641961636 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.2329268293 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 61.2550243902 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 11.4140731707 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.06136585366 114% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 40.7170731707 260% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 85, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... small version of the society we live in . In society, we tend to neglect diversit...
^^
Line 7, column 352, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...vide a long term benefit in shaping the students character and thereby protecting the di...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: AN_OTHER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'another'? This word sequence is usually spelled together.
Suggestion: Another
...ferent ones from emotional distress. An other action which could be beneficial is con...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 100, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Though
... robust anti-bully committee in schools.Though they are present today, they are inacti...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 198, Rule ID: COMPRISE_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprise' or 'consist of'?
Suggestion: comprise; consist of
...ctive in most cases. The committee must comprise of all the stake holders including represe...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 194, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...The next to come will also be the same. Thus it is the responsibility of every adult...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, so, thus, such as, in most cases, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 1.00243902439 1197% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 6.8 191% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 20.0 5.60731707317 357% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 33.7804878049 142% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 965.302439024 196% => OK
No of words: 365.0 196.424390244 186% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17534246575 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 3.73543355544 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91423740673 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 106.607317073 209% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61095890411 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 283.868780488 203% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 4.33902439024 230% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 8.94146341463 201% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3993010122 43.030603864 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.944444444 112.824112599 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2777777778 22.9334400587 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.23603664747 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 1.13902439024 615% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111200115748 0.215688989381 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0364678793562 0.103423049105 35% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0237745657851 0.0843802449381 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0611250606685 0.15604864568 39% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0146815335558 0.0819641961636 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.2329268293 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 61.2550243902 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 11.4140731707 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.06136585366 114% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 40.7170731707 260% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.