The chart below gives information about global sales of games software CDs and DVD or video Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information

Essay topics:

The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.

The given bar graph depicts the information about the sales amount of games,CD's, DVD's in the world from the year 2000 to 2003.
Overal, it is crystal clear that DVD's gradually replaced with the CD's and games software sales increased for the given period of time.

It is evident that the sales volume of games software increased over the year and CD's were the most sold items in the terms of its sales amount among they given items though DVD's slowly replaced CD's. According to the data in the year 2000, the sales amount of CD's was 35 billion dollars worldwide. In this year the sales amount for DVD'/ videos and games were less than 20 billion dollars. The sales amount of these three items remained almost same in the next year with some increment in the sales amount of DVD/video and games.
Probing ahead, over the year the sales amount of CD's decreased and finally reached to just over 30 billion dollars in 2003. On the contrary, the sales amount for DVD/video increased significantly and the amount reached almost near the sales the amount of the CD's. Similarly the sales the amount of the games increased and reached to over 15 billion dollar in 2003.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 32, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The given bar graph depicts the information about the sales amount of ga...
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Line 1, column 77, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , CDs
...ormation about the sales amount of games,CDs, DVDs in the world from the year 2000 t...
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Line 2, column 120, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... software sales increased for the given period of time. It is evident that the sales volume...
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Line 5, column 264, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
...t near the sales the amount of the CDs. Similarly the sales the amount of the games incre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, similarly, so, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 958.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 206.0 196.424390244 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65048543689 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78849575616 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.14173965089 2.65546596893 81% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432038834951 0.547539520022 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 274.5 283.868780488 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.4691239593 43.030603864 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.857142857 112.824112599 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4285714286 22.9334400587 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 5.23603664747 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226288118055 0.215688989381 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13425411009 0.103423049105 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383122554483 0.0843802449381 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158758117591 0.15604864568 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0191656035552 0.0819641961636 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.2329268293 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.42 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 11.4140731707 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 11.4329268293 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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