The chart below shows the percentage of females aged 16 25 in particular country who participate in sports compares with the percentage of people who watch them in 2000

Essay topics:

The chart below shows the percentage of females aged 16-25 in particular country who participate in sports compares with the percentage of people who watch them in 2000

Given is the bar chart revealing the proportion of females who were aged between 16 and 25 years old in a particular country that taking part in sports with those watching them in 2000
Overall, it is immediately apparent that the percentage of females who participated in tennis was far higher than that of other sports. Additionally, the figure of who joined and watched in badminton was the lowest chosen by girls over the period year
As can be seen from the chart, the majority of women were chosen to participate in tennis(50%) which was 20% higher than viewers (30%). At the same time, there was 30% of females aged from 16 to 25 years old participated in golf, compared to around 10% of those who just watched it.
Turning to other remaining groups, the figures of viewers and players of Athletic and basketball were similar, around 10% and 20% respectively. Furthermore, there was approximately over 10% in the proportion of females aged 16-25 years old taking part in badminton and horse riding and racing, while having the same number of people who watch these sports, just under 10%

Votes
Average: 7.5 (4 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 372, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e who watch these sports, just under 10%
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 907.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 189.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79894179894 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60727942378 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 270.9 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 22.4926829268 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.9238373078 43.030603864 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 181.4 112.824112599 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.8 22.9334400587 165% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.23603664747 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365775757723 0.215688989381 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.195441945918 0.103423049105 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.159334977825 0.0843802449381 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233622870074 0.15604864568 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104662085605 0.0819641961636 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 13.2329268293 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.84 61.2550243902 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.3012195122 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 11.4329268293 249% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.9970731707 153% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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