The chart below shows the result of a survey about what people of deferent age group say make the most happy

Essay topics:

The chart below shows the result of a survey about what people of deferent age group say make the most happy

The given two pie charts provides the in formation about what makes people most happy in categories of people under 30 and people over 30. We can observe that achievement at work occupies majority of space in both pie charts.
People under 30 very felt happy by achieving something in their work which was occupied 31% and stand’s in first position . doing hobbies is the second most hippest thing with occupying 22% chart and finely travelling, having a good appearance and other factor are stand with below 20% with 15%, 18% and 14% which, majority of people are not happy by doing this last three works.
On the other pie chart which gives information about people over 30. again people enjoyed and felt happy by achieving some thing in their work with 32% occupation in piechart. Doing hobbies blog was increased competitively with occupation of 24%. Unexpectedly Financial security comes in to the figure with 20% and at last being with family and other factor stands with 14% and 10% respectively. These are the only blogs which is having below 20% of occupation.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 179, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... We can observe that achievement at work occupies majority of space in both pie c...
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Line 2, column 79, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ieving something in their work which was occupied 31% and stand's in first p...
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Line 2, column 128, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: .
...d 31% and stand's in first position . doing hobbies is the second most hippes...
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Line 2, column 130, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Doing
...1% and stand's in first position . doing hobbies is the second most hippest thin...
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Line 2, column 158, Rule ID: MOST_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'hippest' (without 'most') when you use the superlative.
Suggestion: hippest
... position . doing hobbies is the second most hippest thing with occupying 22% chart and fin...
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Line 2, column 158, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'most the hippest'.
Suggestion: most the hippest
... position . doing hobbies is the second most hippest thing with occupying 22% chart and fin...
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Line 2, column 191, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...second most hippest thing with occupying 22% chart and finely travelling, having ...
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Line 2, column 310, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...e stand with below 20% with 15%, 18% and 14% which, majority of people are not ha...
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Line 3, column 69, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Again
...gives information about people over 30. again people enjoyed and felt happy by achiev...
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Line 3, column 118, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'something'?
Suggestion: something
...ple enjoyed and felt happy by achieving some thing in their work with 32% occupation in pi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, second, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 893.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 183.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87978142077 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67800887145 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48667882875 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 106.607317073 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579234972678 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 260.1 283.868780488 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2091678745 43.030603864 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2222222222 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.88888888889 5.23603664747 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 1.69756097561 589% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186265321843 0.215688989381 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830302449215 0.103423049105 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0912697206522 0.0843802449381 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149130079314 0.15604864568 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597030759104 0.0819641961636 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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