The chart shows the sports played in 2003 . All fingers in percentage.

Essay topics:

The chart shows the sports played in 2003 . All fingers in percentage.

The bar graph reveals the information about the sports played by girls and boys in Australia during the year 2003 . The data is calibrated in per centum which is clearly and coherently representated .
Overall, it is clearly seen that girls were highly participated in netball sports activity as compare to boys in the given time period.
To begin with, Boys were interested in swimming activities only 13% ,while girls had been show more interested (21%) in that activity . In addition to this, soccer sports had been done by boys as compare to girls (25%) ,but boys had been show quite less interested by 2%. Moreover, Tennis and basketball had been done up to 8%,7% and 6% by girls and boys respectively.
Apart from all that Martial arts activity were played by boys (10%).whereas, 3% had been done that activity by girls. Furthermore, girls and boys were show similar interested in Athletics by 4% and 6% .while, cricket sports had been done by boys as compare to girls. Moving a head , other sports activity were played by boys and girls by 20% and 12% respectively.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, moreover, so, whereas, while, apart from, in addition, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 882.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 184.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79347826087 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63589458144 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 106.607317073 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 257.4 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 20.472203377 43.030603864 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.0 112.824112599 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4444444444 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.55555555556 5.23603664747 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136904720764 0.215688989381 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0710723622941 0.103423049105 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529875355084 0.0843802449381 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0952477989381 0.15604864568 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422724992981 0.0819641961636 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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