The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960 2010

Essay topics:

The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010

The pie chart compares the proportion of workers in three different categories in town A and town B from 1960 to 2010.
Overall, it is evident that while the number of people working in manufacturing witnessed a significant increase, the opposite was true for the other two categories in both towns. It is notable that the highest quantity of workers in town A was in manufacturing whereas in town B that was in sales.
In 1960, there were about 29% people in town A working in manufacturing in comparison with only 8% in town B. Over 50 years of the period, these figures experienced a dramatic upward trend to 64% for the former and 24% for the latter.
Sales become the most common job in both town A and town B, accounting for 41% and 72% respectively. In the meantime, there were only 30% people working in services in town A and this figure was slightly smaller, standing at about 20% in town B. The year 2010 saw a substantial decrease of 21% and 18% in the number of people working as salesperson. Likewise, starting at 30% in 1960, the figure for people working in services in town A declined moderately to 16% while that for town B climbed of 21% at the end of the time survey.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (2 votes)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, likewise, so, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 33.7804878049 124% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 973.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 218.0 196.424390244 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46330275229 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84250218741 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71218869387 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490825688073 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 289.8 283.868780488 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.0363756538 43.030603864 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.111111111 112.824112599 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2222222222 22.9334400587 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55555555556 5.23603664747 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400207806869 0.215688989381 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.187412688207 0.103423049105 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113689750357 0.0843802449381 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264809855293 0.15604864568 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0924230138457 0.0819641961636 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 11.4140731707 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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