The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960 2010

Essay topics:

The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010.

The pie charts illustrate the proportion of people who worked in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960 and 2010.
A cursory glance at the diagram is enough to make it clear that the major of total people working in town B worked in manufacturing both in 1960 and 2010.
As can be seen from the first diagram, in 1960, the figure for people working in manufacturing in town A accounted for 41%. Meanwhile, the number of people working in sales and services of this town was nearly the same, which were 30% and 29% respectively. However, in 2010, the figure for people working in manufacturing declined drastically to a fifth. In a similar fashion, the percentage of people working in sales halved in 2010. In contrast, the rate of people working in services witnessed a significant increase by more than a third.
As the second diagram suggests, in 1960, people working in manufacturing in town B took up a majority proportion which was 70%. In the meantime, people working in sales and services occupied 20% and 10% respectively. Nevertheless, the proportion of people working in manufacturing decreased by nearly a fifth in 2010. In the meanwhile, the number of people working in sales saw a slight growth to 22% in 2010. Similarly, the figure for people working in services presented a considerable rise to a quarter in 2010.
As a general trend, the rate of people working in manufacturing went down between 1960 and 2010, whereas the proportion of people working in services went up in the years given.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 356, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "In a similar fashion" with adverb for "similar"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...turing declined drastically to a fifth. In a similar fashion, the percentage of people working in sa...
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Line 5, column 166, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...ople working in services went up in the years given.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, nevertheless, second, similarly, so, third, whereas, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 33.7804878049 160% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1259.0 965.302439024 130% => OK
No of words: 263.0 196.424390244 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78707224335 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 3.73543355544 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91282548883 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.406844106464 0.547539520022 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 370.8 283.868780488 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.33902439024 254% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.6729036099 43.030603864 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8461538462 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2307692308 22.9334400587 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.23603664747 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.456902633315 0.215688989381 212% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.206173036526 0.103423049105 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129095421385 0.0843802449381 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.339064456329 0.15604864568 217% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144146462311 0.0819641961636 176% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 8.06136585366 86% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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