The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the information about water utilisation in six regions of the world, namely North America, South America, Europe, Africa, Central Asia and South East Asia. Overall, a considerable amount of water is used for industrial purpose and agricultural purpose, while the least amount of water is consumed for domestic use.
First of all, the primary water consumption in both North America and Europe appear in the industrial sector, which are both accounting for about a half in the total. As for the other four regions, the water usage for this purpose only constitutes a very insignificant portion, with 12% in South East Asia, 10% in South America, 7% in Africa, and 5% in Central Asia respectively.
On the contrary, agriculture becomes the largest water consumer in the above four places. To be more specific, more than nine-tenths of water is spent on the agricultural sector in Central Asia. This proportion reduces gradually in Africa (84%), South East (81%), and South America (71%), whereas North America and Europe both only consume about one-third of their water for agricultural purpose. As for domestic water consumption, it always makes up the least portion with the range of 7%-19% in the six areas.
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Essay evaluation report
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need more comparisons.
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The pie charts illustrate the information about water utilisation in six regions of the world, namely North America, South America, Europe, Africa, Central Asia and South East Asia.
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The pie charts illustrate water utilisation for three main purposes in six regions of the world. //don't need those regions or categories. Keep it simple.
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First of all, the primary water consumption in both North America and Europe appear in the industrial sector, which are both accounting for about a half in the total.
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As can be seen from the given pie charts, North America's water consumption has a striking similarity to that of Europe. In both of these continents, about half of the water is required in industrial sectors, almost one-third for crop cultivation and 13-15% for people’s household use.
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more than nine-tenths of water is spent on the agricultural sector in Central Asia.
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about nine-tenths of water is spent on the agricultural sector in Central Asia. //be accurate
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On the contrary, agriculture becomes the largest water consumer in the above four places. To be more specific, more than nine-tenths of water is spent on the agricultural sector in Central Asia.
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On the contrary, a great portion of water goes to agricultural division in Asian, African and North American which is over eight-tenths of their total consumption. The highest water consumption in cultivation could be observed in Central Asia (88%) which is almost treble than that of Europe.
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As for domestic water consumption, it always makes up the least portion with the range of 7%-19% in the six areas.
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Household water use in South America was higher than other parts of the world and that stands at 19%. Only 7 to 9 percent water is used by people in Asian and African countries for their personal use at home.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 10
No. of Words: 202 200
No. of Characters: 985 1000
No. of Different Words: 100 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.77 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.876 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.685 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 65 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 50 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 26 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.887 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.476 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.626 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.06 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, third, whereas, while, as for, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1035.0 965.302439024 107% => OK
No of words: 202.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12376237624 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71217108113 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 106.607317073 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539603960396 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 329.4 283.868780488 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1868981439 43.030603864 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.375 112.824112599 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.375 5.23603664747 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166512530487 0.215688989381 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0826934158055 0.103423049105 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504555188325 0.0843802449381 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133514456035 0.15604864568 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530129765284 0.0819641961636 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.2329268293 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 61.2550243902 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.3012195122 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 11.4140731707 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 40.7170731707 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.4329268293 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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