The charts below show the percentages of the water used in different sectors in Sydney Australia in 1997 and 2007

Essay topics:

The charts below show the percentages of the water used in different sectors in Sydney, Australia in 1997 and 2007.

The pie charts illustrate how much water did six different sectors in Sydney and Australia use between 1997 and 2007. Overall, Food industry was the most significant consumer whilst the amount of water required for building industry accounted for the least compared with others by far in both years. In addition, during the whole period ,while the water consumption of service industry and household use increased considerbly, the figure for the others decreased.
The three biggest consumers in 1997 was food industry, household use, and manufacturing with 48%, 19%, and 15%, respectively. However, whilst household use increased its proportion to almost one fifth, manufacturing saw a noticeable decrease to 11 %. Despite the fact that food industry fell most, drop of 7% to 41% in 2007, it still remain as the highest water consumer.
In term of building industry, it had 5% of the total in 1997, but fell noticeably by 3% in 2020. Service industry went from the fourth usage in 1997 to the second largest in 202o, achieving a percentage of 25%.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, still, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 877.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 173.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06936416185 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76570570058 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635838150289 0.547539520022 116% => OK
syllable_count: 252.9 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.3818119165 43.030603864 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.625 112.824112599 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.625 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 5.23603664747 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27257892173 0.215688989381 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117160347509 0.103423049105 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.141541966938 0.0843802449381 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160375035047 0.15604864568 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076213099335 0.0819641961636 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 11.4140731707 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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