The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the percentage breakdown of undergraduates in one England university that can communicate in other languages besides English in 2000 and 2010. Overall, the most popular second language in British was Spanish, while German-speaking students were the least throughout the surveyed period.
First of all, it can be seen from the charts that students who were monolingual halved its proportion from 20% to 10% during the decade. Similarly, students speaking French only as an additional language slightly shrank its share by 5% from 15% to 10%. Nevertheless, students who could speak French remained the minimum portion with 10% in the same period.
By contrast, as the most common foreign language, the rate of Spanish-speaking students in British continually preserved its top place with the increase from 30% to 35% within the decade. Moreover, the same trend also could be viewed in the bilingual group of another language and two other languages, which both rose its composition by 5%, from 15% to 20% and 10% to 15% respectively.
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Essay evaluation report
The pie charts illustrate the percentage breakdown of undergraduates in one England university that can communicate...
Description: that here modifying university? or undergraduates? or percentage breakdown? it is not clear.
flaws:
It looks better. but still we don't over use ' students' as the subject in the second paragraph.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 10
No. of Words: 170 200
No. of Characters: 856 1000
No. of Different Words: 103 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.611 4.0
Average Word Length: 5.035 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.974 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 64 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 49 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 37 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.135 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.479 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.694 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, moreover, nevertheless, second, similarly, so, while, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 892.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 170.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24705882353 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97674958004 2.65546596893 112% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617647058824 0.547539520022 113% => OK
syllable_count: 251.1 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.9086552724 43.030603864 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.428571429 112.824112599 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2857142857 22.9334400587 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.5714285714 5.23603664747 240% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253926573289 0.215688989381 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12176331159 0.103423049105 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627789838689 0.0843802449381 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178221484738 0.15604864568 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0807648096684 0.0819641961636 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.2329268293 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 61.2550243902 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 11.4140731707 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.06136585366 111% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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