The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts compare the causes of happiness for people who are under 30 and people over 30.

Overall, achieving at work is the most common reason to make people happy, no matter their age. Some reasons for people who are under 30 to be happy are similar to those over 30, but there are some differences as well.

One third the total proportion of people over 30 and people under 30 agreed that achievement at work is the most significant reason for them to be happy. Similarly, other factors and doing hobbies can make them happy as well, respectively 14% and 22% for those under 30, and 10% and 24% for those over 30.

In contrast, 14% of people over 30 think being with family makes them happy, the same proportion of people under 30 think travelling makes them happy. Moreover, 18% of the under 30 proportion think having good out looking make them happy while 20% of people over 30 are happy because of financial security.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, moreover, similarly, so, third, well, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 780.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 168.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64285714286 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24661972084 2.65546596893 85% => OK
Unique words: 85.0 106.607317073 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505952380952 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 231.3 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.5390856915 43.030603864 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 111.428571429 112.824112599 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 22.9334400587 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1428571429 5.23603664747 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164505661506 0.215688989381 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107023790523 0.103423049105 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564442003527 0.0843802449381 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121863331173 0.15604864568 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348886860624 0.0819641961636 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 40.7170731707 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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