The charts below shows the percentage of time eorking adults spent on working adults spent on different activities in a particulur country in 1958 and 2008

Essay topics:

The charts below shows the percentage of time eorking adults spent on working adults spent on different activities in a particulur country in 1958 and 2008.

The pie chart reveals the information about the proportion of time spent by adults on various typea of activities in a one nation in 1958 and 2008.

It is clearly seen from the chart that, the highest percent if time spent by people on working as 42% in 2008 and it was almost 33% in 1958. Wheras, going out with friend and family as well as other interests or playing sports was 6% in 2008 and 1958. Apart from this, 32% amount of time disbursed by adults on sleeping and it declined by 7% in latter year.

In addition to this, Travel to work by the adults were the least enjoyable activity as only 2 % and 8%respectively in both the years. Interestingly, 19% of adults used to spent their time on going out with friends and family as 19% in 1958. While, Relaxing at home was the 13% in 2008 that was only 8% in the initial year.

Overall, it can crystal clear that every type of activities was increased in 2008 except sleeping and going out with friends.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...9% of adults used to spent their time on going out with friends and family as 19%...
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...with friends and family as 19% in 1958. While, Relaxing at home was the 13% in 2008 t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, well, while, apart from, in addition, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 787.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 179.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.39664804469 4.92477711251 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35960736428 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558659217877 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 218.7 283.868780488 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 20.5593652626 43.030603864 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.375 112.824112599 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.375 22.9334400587 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.23603664747 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330855924424 0.215688989381 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146410672713 0.103423049105 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0977141518359 0.0843802449381 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214945747795 0.15604864568 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100018919887 0.0819641961636 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.98 61.2550243902 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.54 11.4140731707 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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