The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in Towns A and B in two years 1960 and 2010

Essay topics:

The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in Towns A and B in two years, 1960 and 2010.

The pie charts give information about the proportion of working employing in various sectors in towns A and B in 1960 and 2010.
Overall, In both town A and town B, the proportion of worker employing in the Manufacturing sector increased from 1960 to 2010. Meanwhile, it was witnessed a decrease in the rate of people working in the Sales over that period.
When it comes to the growth, in town A, the proportion of people having a job in the Manufacturing significantly rose from 29 percent to 64 percent between the year 1960 and the year 2010. Similarly, in town B, that rate also increased from 10 percent to 25 percent from 1960 to 2010. However, it was only seen a slight increase in the percentage of people employing in the Services sector in town B from 20 percent to 22 percent between 1960 and 2010.
In terms of the decrease, in town A, the proportion of people working in both the Sales and Services sector experienced a double drop from 41 percent to 20 percent and from 30 percent to 16 percent over the course of 50 years starting from the year 1960, respectively. It can be seen a similar decrease in the percentage of people working in the Services sector in town B from 70 percent to 53 percent between 1960 and 2010.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, similarly, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 33.7804878049 154% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1014.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 226.0 196.424390244 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48672566372 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68570584724 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 85.0 106.607317073 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.37610619469 0.547539520022 69% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 281.7 283.868780488 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.7748756512 43.030603864 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.75 112.824112599 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.25 22.9334400587 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 5.23603664747 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354354655894 0.215688989381 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.210138897969 0.103423049105 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714794241187 0.0843802449381 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272853519716 0.15604864568 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266507478009 0.0819641961636 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 76.9 61.2550243902 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 11.4140731707 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.06136585366 87% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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