The charts show the percentage of peple working in different sectors in Towns A and B in two years 1960 and 2010

Essay topics:

The charts show the percentage of peple working in different sectors in Towns A and B in two years, 1960 and 2010

The pie charts compare the percentage of workers who work in different sectors between Towns A and B in 1960 and 2010.
Overall, it is clear that in 1960, the sales was the sectors which attracted more employees than others in both Towns A and B. Nevertheless, there are many significantly changes being taken place after 50 years mainly in the manufacturing and the sales.
In terms of the services, this sector accounted for 30% in Town A in 1960, compared to that of Town B, at only 20%. Besides, the percentage of workers who work in the sales was the highest in both Towns A and B in 1960, at 29% and 70%, respectively. In contrast, the lowest proportion in 1960 was the manufacturing, at only 29% in Town A and 10% in Town B.
The human resource structure had many considerable alternations after 50 years. In 2010, while the percentage of people participating in the manufacturing significantly expanded up to 64% in Town A, that of Town B was at only 25%. However, a number of employees in Town B concentrated on the sales, which accounted for 53%, compared to 20% of Town A. Finally, 16% of workers in Town A took part in the service sector, which was lower than that of Town B by 6%

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, however, if, nevertheless, so, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 979.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 219.0 196.424390244 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4703196347 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89369488909 2.65546596893 109% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488584474886 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 279.9 283.868780488 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 17.7538728169 43.030603864 41% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.9 112.824112599 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9 22.9334400587 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7 5.23603664747 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338317613637 0.215688989381 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150694293546 0.103423049105 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120954383359 0.0843802449381 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252484554427 0.15604864568 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133316393547 0.0819641961636 163% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.2329268293 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 11.4140731707 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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