Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefor they should be encourage to watch television regularly at home and at school.
To what extend do you agree or disagree ?
It is often argued that watching television can be an effective way to teach children so parents and teacher should encourage them to watch television frequently at school and home. I strongly disagree with this statement and think that allowing children to spend more time watching TV can lead to affect negatively on child development and may cause obesity problem.
Permitting Children to watch TV more often can impact on their development process. Children should spend more time with their parents and teacher to build strong abilities especially the verbal ones instead of sitting in font of the TV all day for learning purpose. Also, children need to be involved in various activities to boost their psychosocial and emotional skills along with discipline behavior. The more children encourage to watch TV, the less these abilities can be developed. For example, the children learn their communication skills from the conversation with adults - teachers, parents, caregivers – so their language is built up properly, and this is what cannot be gained by allowing the child to watch television that often.
Moreover, sitting at home or school to watch TV can cause obesity for most children. They will be more likely to watch TV instead of playing outside with others or attending Physical education classes. This can increase the prospect of making a child overweighted. A recent study shows that one of watching TV for more than 4 hours a day is considered one of the main factor of increasing obesity rate among children.
In conclusion, TV can be one of the methods to teach children effectively, but encouraging them to watch regularly can cause some child development issues, as well as increasing the probability of obesity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...elopment and may cause obesity problem. Permitting Children to watch TV more oft...
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to purpose'
Suggestion: to purpose
... in font of the TV all day for learning purpose. Also, children need to be involved in ...
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Line 2, column 434, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'watching'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: watching
...e behavior. The more children encourage to watch TV, the less these abilities can be dev...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, may, moreover, so, well, for example, in conclusion, in fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 1.00243902439 1397% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 5.60731707317 321% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1461.0 965.302439024 151% => OK
No of words: 284.0 196.424390244 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14436619718 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 3.73543355544 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80428814672 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 106.607317073 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531690140845 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 283.868780488 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3161311403 43.030603864 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.75 112.824112599 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 22.9334400587 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.91666666667 5.23603664747 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336060814766 0.215688989381 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146200653548 0.103423049105 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103971681516 0.0843802449381 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23365183303 0.15604864568 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0726834763981 0.0819641961636 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 11.4140731707 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 40.7170731707 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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