The diagram below shows the distribution of men and women key professions in Malaysia in 1970

Essay topics:

The diagram below shows the distribution of men and women key professions in Malaysia in 1970.

The bar chart gives an overall view about the percentage of men and women working in different careers in the year 1970.

As can be seen in the bar, it is noticeable that male dominated most of the profession given. In particular, of 11 professions, Jurrists, Accountants, economists and Architects engineers saw the biggest difference between two genders, with man accounting for over 90 percent and women never exceeding 10%. A similar pattern was also recorded in Physical Scientists, Medical, and Statisticist Mathematicians, but with a narrower gap, a difference of nearly 70%. Meanwhile, the proportion of male continued to outnumber its counterpart in all three teacher levels, with male taking up from 60% to 70%, and female contributing to the remaining.

In remarkable contrast, however, with the last profession, nearly 100% nursing and midwives were women, leaving a mere 1% for men.

To recap, in 1970, men took up most of the working positions, except nursing and midwives where women actually made up approximately 100%.

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Average: 9.5 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, so, while, in particular

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 888.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34939759036 4.92477711251 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07609615299 2.65546596893 116% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 106.607317073 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.698795180723 0.547539520022 128% => OK
syllable_count: 257.4 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 3.36585365854 267% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3469674226 43.030603864 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.857142857 112.824112599 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7142857143 22.9334400587 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 5.23603664747 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135403449333 0.215688989381 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0622722672348 0.103423049105 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521228870453 0.0843802449381 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.096409975596 0.15604864568 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039856113649 0.0819641961636 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.2329268293 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 61.2550243902 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.3012195122 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 11.4140731707 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.06136585366 118% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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