the diagram below shows the process of milk production

The provided diagram illustrates the process of how milk is produced in detailed.
It is apparent from the data supplied that the production starts from taking fresh milk from cows to delivering to supermarkets and shops after six procedures.
As can be seen in the first four steps, cows are kept in farms and feed with grass in fields. After that, raw milk is taken from cows by milking machines twice a day before being stored at cool temperature, it is subsequently transferred to milk tankers. Then milk tankers transport refrigerated milk to Dairy where cheese, cream, and butter are manufactured for daily basis of consumers.
Regarding the last two steps, the stored milk is then pasteurized to eliminate any harmful bacteria which helps to give the best milk quality. In the last step, milk is then processed and bottled in an assembly line before being delivered to supermarkets and shops for consumption.

Votes
Average: 6.5 (13 votes)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, look, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 636.0 965.302439024 66% => OK
No of words: 126.0 196.424390244 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04761904762 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.35036895883 3.73543355544 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80831289482 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 88.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.698412698413 0.547539520022 128% => OK
syllable_count: 193.5 283.868780488 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 18.7666592658 43.030603864 44% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.5 112.824112599 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.75 22.9334400587 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.125 5.23603664747 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218357110962 0.215688989381 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0939480614882 0.103423049105 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.069713663761 0.0843802449381 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139016735549 0.15604864568 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558409027469 0.0819641961636 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.2329268293 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.3012195122 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 11.4140731707 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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