The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The picture depicts the information about the process of bricks production, starting from the digging step to delivering products.

Firstly, the clay is dug using mechanical digger. then, it placed on the metal grid to be filtered and passed onto a roller. Following which, the filtered-clay is mixed with two other raw materials (sand and water). The third steps of manufacturing are forming the mixture, either by using the moulding or cutting using the wire.

At the following stage, the wet bricks are moved to the drying oven for about 1 or 2 days. At the fifth stages, the bricks are heated in two phases, the first phase is putting them in moderate temperature (200 – 980 degree) and the second step is moving it to the hight temperature oven (870-1.000 Celcius). And then, it is saved in a cooling room for about two or three night. Finally, the bricks are packaged and send to the market.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 51, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Then
...he clay is dug using mechanical digger. then, it placed on the metal grid to be filt...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, second, then, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 741.0 965.302439024 77% => OK
No of words: 157.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71974522293 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53976893118 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53645576628 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.624203821656 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 217.8 283.868780488 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.668868118 43.030603864 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.3333333333 112.824112599 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4444444444 22.9334400587 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.23603664747 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102508985006 0.215688989381 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0399038084523 0.103423049105 39% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0316502163039 0.0843802449381 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0702180172359 0.15604864568 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028684480844 0.0819641961636 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.2329268293 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 11.4140731707 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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