The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram depicts how carbonated drinks are produced.

Overall, there are five main steps of manufacturing carbonated water. The process starts with pumping raw water into the factory and ends with delivering those boxes to supermarkets.

At the first stage of the process, raw water is pumped into the filter which is used to move water to a water softener later. After being softened, this flow moves through the chemicals and then is pumped into electric heaters to make it evaporate. Stage number 2 continues with putting this flow through a pipe to cool and after that carbon dioxide is evaporated by a machine to create carbonated water.

At the third stage of the process, carbonated water is floated through a pipe to lead to a tank which is used to blend produced water with color, syrup, and flavor. Following this, carbonated water is filtered and filled into bottles and cans. The process finishes with packaging these containers into boxes and delivering them to supermarkets.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 2, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The diagram depicts how carbonated drink...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, so, then, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 845.0 965.302439024 88% => OK
No of words: 165.0 196.424390244 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12121212121 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.601857075 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 91.0 106.607317073 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551515151515 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 261.9 283.868780488 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.1708352804 43.030603864 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8888888889 112.824112599 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 22.9334400587 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.44444444444 5.23603664747 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106359246691 0.215688989381 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587985614995 0.103423049105 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397614031945 0.0843802449381 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0889576271496 0.15604864568 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397738401706 0.0819641961636 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.2329268293 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 61.2550243902 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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