The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps illustrate the alterations that took place at West Park Secondary School during a 60-year period from 1950 to 2010.
It is noticeable from the map that the biggest change was the construction of a car park. Additionally, houses and farmland had completely disappeared by 2010.
In 1950, the school was relatively small, and it was situated in the south area of the main road. There were houses to the northwest of the road, however, they were demolished to make way for the car park and science block in 1980. At the same time, sports field was built in the place where a farmland used to be while the playground remained unchanged in size and position.
From 1980 to 2010, the car park witnessed a great extension while science block and the school still remained close to the main road. Meanwhile, sports field was narrowed significantly and the playground also became smaller over the period of 30 years.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing a 60-year period from 1950 to 2010. It is noticeable from the map that the b...
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Line 3, column 344, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: unchanged
...sed to be while the playground remained unchanged in size and position. From 1980 to 2010, the c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, second, so, still, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 763.0 965.302439024 79% => OK
No of words: 159.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79874213836 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55098862472 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60132659301 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 91.0 106.607317073 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572327044025 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 216.0 283.868780488 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.0143186453 43.030603864 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.375 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.875 22.9334400587 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 5.23603664747 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175979884435 0.215688989381 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759295824644 0.103423049105 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061085681968 0.0843802449381 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115115671856 0.15604864568 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555889401671 0.0819641961636 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.2329268293 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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