The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.

Essay topics:

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The diagrams illustrate the transformation of the West Park Secondary School since its inception in 1950 to 2010.
 
Overall, the houses and farmland have disappeared from the school premises over the years. Car parking, science block and sports field  have replaced them. 

First, from the school outlay in 1980 we can see that they have constructed a science block next to the school building and car parking being introduced to the left of science block. School redesigned the farmland into a sports field .

In 2010, they expanded the car parking, shrinking the sports field by a significant margin. Sports field now exists between car parking and playground. They altered play ground to create space for a sports field.

Finally, the diagrams reflect substantial metamorphosis of school, with a majority of land being allocated to car parking and school buildings. They limited play ground and sports field to one quarter of the space in 2010.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, second

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 822.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 148.0 196.424390244 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55405405405 4.92477711251 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.48791127476 3.73543355544 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13030955182 2.65546596893 118% => OK
Unique words: 86.0 106.607317073 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.581081081081 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 209.7 283.868780488 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.2098173375 43.030603864 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3333333333 112.824112599 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4444444444 22.9334400587 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 5.23603664747 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13126695535 0.215688989381 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0635779193938 0.103423049105 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0786429461798 0.0843802449381 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10184033782 0.15604864568 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0857425679615 0.0819641961636 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.61 11.4140731707 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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