The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

Essay topics:

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given figures illustrate artificial linear processes of producing cement and concrete for the purposes of construction. The cement-making process begins with limestone and clay being crushed and ends with packaged bags of cement. The product of the cement-making process is then combined with some other components to make concrete.

As can be seen in the first picture, the procedure of cement production involves 4 main stages. Firstly, limestone and clay are put into a crusher to be finer. Next, the fine powder is mixed and transferred to a rotating heater with heat resource being supplied at the end of the heater. After that, the powder becomes a hot material and drops in a grinder to turn into cement. Finally, the cement is packed into bags and used later for concrete production.

In the second picture, there are 4 types of materials compounded in the process of concrete-making. The typically mixed design proportion are 15 % of cement, 10% of water, 25% of fine aggregate, and 50% of coarse aggregate. All the provided materials are finally poured in a mixer to produce concrete. The concrete is then used for constructing houses, bridges, or etc.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... and ends with packaged bags of cement. The product of the cement-making process is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, second, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 980.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 193.0 196.424390244 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07772020725 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72725689877 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89951546375 2.65546596893 109% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 106.607317073 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585492227979 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 304.2 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.9422154723 43.030603864 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.6666666667 112.824112599 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0833333333 22.9334400587 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.23603664747 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270193886589 0.215688989381 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0991140705244 0.103423049105 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0735266201517 0.0843802449381 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18046332461 0.15604864568 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0677099916919 0.0819641961636 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 61.2550243902 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 11.4140731707 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.06136585366 117% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 40.7170731707 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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