The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two diagrams show the methods of producing cement and concrete, and what equipment are needed in this process. To product cement needs limestone and clay as ingredient and then the cements are used as ingredient to produce concrete.

There are four steps of making cement. The limestones and clay become powder after going through the crusher. Then the powder is mixed in mixer and after that these mixture is delivered into a rotating heater which has a machine heated at the end of the tube. Then these mixtures are drying and crushed by grinder when going through it. And finally the cements are packaged by bags.

The concrete is produced with special formula that needs 15% cement, 10% water, 25% sand and the rest half all is gravel which means small stones. Those ingredients are mixed in a concrete mixer. The concrete mixer will continually rotates to combine these materials and it finally produces concrete.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 160, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this mixture' or 'these mixtures'?
Suggestion: this mixture; these mixtures
...powder is mixed in mixer and after that these mixture is delivered into a rotating heater whi...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 233, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'rotate'
Suggestion: rotate
...er. The concrete mixer will continually rotates to combine these materials and it final...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 18.0 33.7804878049 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 774.0 965.302439024 80% => OK
No of words: 156.0 196.424390244 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96153846154 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53411884305 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33089298986 2.65546596893 88% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621794871795 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 234.9 283.868780488 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.2770925604 43.030603864 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.4 112.824112599 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6 22.9334400587 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.3 5.23603664747 25% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209868818739 0.215688989381 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0902027543185 0.103423049105 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0834412929859 0.0843802449381 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144384220047 0.15604864568 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0789205433959 0.0819641961636 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.2329268293 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.3012195122 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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