The diagrams show changes in a student common room

Essay topics:

The diagrams show changes in a student common room

Given are the the maps comparing the candidate’s common room in a 5 year-period.
It is perceptibe that tables for student and other domestic facilitites accounted for the majority of the total space 5 years ago, but in this day and age, there are many modern equipment in this zone.
Childrent 5 years ago did not have the chance to entertain in their space, the room was fraught with 4 simple tables, on the top, there was a chain of common domestic equipments, in order to provide daily needs for the student.
But through a developing period, many useful things are set up in this space. The number of tables reduced for 2 , replacing with long desk and a yellow bench for laptop. It is conspicuous that the space now have become more exiting, catch up with the modern society, namely some high-tech things like: Television in the bottom corner with 3 arm chairs in front of it and the drinks machine is also put in next to the refrigerator. Furthermore, it is easily to see by sight that instead of two benches

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
Given are the the maps comparing the candidate’s ...
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Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
Given are the the maps comparing the candidate’s common r...
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Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
Given are the the maps comparing the candidate’s common r...
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Line 2, column 167, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun equipment seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much modern equipment', 'a good deal of modern equipment'.
Suggestion: much modern equipment; a good deal of modern equipment
...ago, but in this day and age, there are many modern equipment in this zone. Childrent 5 years ago di...
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Line 4, column 112, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...pace. The number of tables reduced for 2 , replacing with long desk and a yellow b...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 837.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 183.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5737704918 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67800887145 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58964397309 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 106.607317073 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622950819672 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 259.2 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.8344060625 43.030603864 176% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.571428571 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1428571429 22.9334400587 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 5.23603664747 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102306234074 0.215688989381 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499554451926 0.103423049105 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676855403597 0.0843802449381 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.087422029087 0.15604864568 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0688616501916 0.0819641961636 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.2329268293 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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